Any beta readers out there?
Jul. 11th, 2005 10:03 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
pjthompsonI'm looking for readers for my novelette, "Sealed With A Curse." I'll be glad to return the favor in kind. ABSOLUTELY NO VAMPIRE CONTENT. :-)
I'm not looking for heavy duty critiques, just an overall feel for if it works or not, if it can still be cut down. I've lost all perspective on it. I'm especially interested in knowing if the beginning draws the reader in—and if it doesn't, the reading task is easily dispensed with. Just stop reading and let me know it doesn't work. I'd run this through the workshop again, but it would take all three slots and I don't want to interrupt posting The Novel at this juncture.
Here's the blurb:
Early in the Eighteenth Century, Simon Jellicoe, a mysterious cunning man, shows up at the English country inn of Megan and Robin Boyle. Strong emotional currents weave through this inn: Megan is four months pregnant by her lover, worthless Neddy Jenkin. She married Robin in order to give her unborn child security, not telling Robin she was pregnant. Although Robin adores her, no man likes to be cuckolded and Megan fears things will go wrong because despite her certain knowledge that Neddy won't take care of her, she still desires him and he's still hanging about. She's thinking of asking Simon Jellicoe to cast a spell to make things turn out right, but as Simon can tell her, spells often go badly awry if they are cast with muddy intentions...
About 15,000 words SMF/61 pages (okay, 15,250 words SMF).
Contact me at sapelle@yahoo.com if you're interested.
I'm not looking for heavy duty critiques, just an overall feel for if it works or not, if it can still be cut down. I've lost all perspective on it. I'm especially interested in knowing if the beginning draws the reader in—and if it doesn't, the reading task is easily dispensed with. Just stop reading and let me know it doesn't work. I'd run this through the workshop again, but it would take all three slots and I don't want to interrupt posting The Novel at this juncture.
Here's the blurb:
Early in the Eighteenth Century, Simon Jellicoe, a mysterious cunning man, shows up at the English country inn of Megan and Robin Boyle. Strong emotional currents weave through this inn: Megan is four months pregnant by her lover, worthless Neddy Jenkin. She married Robin in order to give her unborn child security, not telling Robin she was pregnant. Although Robin adores her, no man likes to be cuckolded and Megan fears things will go wrong because despite her certain knowledge that Neddy won't take care of her, she still desires him and he's still hanging about. She's thinking of asking Simon Jellicoe to cast a spell to make things turn out right, but as Simon can tell her, spells often go badly awry if they are cast with muddy intentions...
About 15,000 words SMF/61 pages (okay, 15,250 words SMF).
Contact me at sapelle@yahoo.com if you're interested.
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Date: 2005-07-12 10:00 am (UTC)Still, if you don't get enough readers, send it my way and I will get round to is as soon as possible. :)