I'm sorry—what?

[pjthompson]

The synopsis writing project seemed to be going well, everything falling into place nicely, until I got to this sentence:

The airship is attacked by flying monkeys...


I quickly changed "monkeys" to "beasts."

But I can't help thinking that if something sounds so ridiculous I'm forced to hide its true nature in the synopsis...maybe I need to change it in the story.

Everything looks ridiculous at this stage of the game.

Comments

[sartorias.livejournal.com]

I used winged monkeys when I had some in a thing, and it seemed to bypass the Flying Monkeys Curse.

[pjthompson]

lol--thanks. I'll take a few deep breaths and proceed.

[geniusofevil.livejournal.com]

leave it. I've felt this same way with my own queries, but I think trying to dance around something to avoid having it seem ridiculous is worse than leaving it in.

[pjthompson]

::takes a deep breath:: Feeling much calmer now.

[geniusofevil.livejournal.com]

you took it out though.

[pjthompson]

It was never in the query. That was the synopsis I was talking about. And as it happens, I've left it out of the latest draft of the synopsis, which I haven't posted yet. Because I want to work on it further.

[windsong5.livejournal.com]

You're probably fine. The agent will be reading it in context to the story, so it should be okay. Remember, one of the most famous witches of all time had flying monkeys and no one ever, ever laughed at her. Well, not until long after she was liquified. ;)

Luck on your synopsis. :D

[pjthompson]

Thank you. I guess I'll calm down.

[melinda-goodin.livejournal.com]

Having just seen Wicked, I nodded at that sentence and said, "and?"

*g*

[pjthompson]

See, I loved those flying monkeys. I blame it all on watching the Wizard of Oz too many times in my youth.

[frigg.livejournal.com]

*lol*
Although flying monkeys does sound more interesting than flying beasts.

[pjthompson]

Okay, I guess I'll relax and let them...fly.

[jmeadows.livejournal.com]

What they said.

[pjthompson]

:-) Okay, I'll just put it down to panic attack number 3,487.

[windsong5.livejournal.com]

*grin*

And they wonder why writers tend to be neurotic. ;-)

[pjthompson]

Ha! I don't think anyone who's been around a writer for longer than an hour wonders... ;-)

[helios137.livejournal.com]

[pjthompson]

Thanks--I needed that. :-)